Roof
dancers
As
the light grows
before
my first coffee
they
soar over houses
rising,gliding,
shouting,
shrieking
Landing,
ballet dancers first
on
points all
balance
on the ridge
quietly
moving
sliding
over tiles.
Line
dancers arrive
sans
invitation
stamp,
stomp
without
synchronisation
back,
fore repeatedly.
Tap
dancers last to join
stamp,
click,
click,
stamp
noise
increases
dance
floor crowded.
Arguments
heard
shouts,
screams
so
much to say
shrieks,
cries
conflict
happening
Gentle
dancers leave
pirouette
away
line
dancers fly
straight
forwards
back
again.
Tap,
tap, stomp, stomp
seagulls all gone
kettle
boils
coffee
is made
roof
quiet for now.
26 comments:
Love the way you capture the landing: "on points all balance....over tiles"
Such a generous (poetic) way to describe the din of gulls on the roof first thing in the morning!
...love this poem, the last lines especially:
"Tap, tap, stomp, stomp
seagulls all gone
kettle boils
coffee is made
roof quiet for now"
...it really painted a picture for me of the scene. At first I thought it was going to be starlings, but soon after I felt they were gulls, which they were! :-)
Yvonne:Thanks.
Mitch Block: They are so noisy but I do quite like their being there so I felt a generous description appropriate.
Kelly: So pleased you liked this poem. Thanks.:)
I liked this! You captured those noisy birds quite well!
Lisa@Two Bears Farm:Thanks for your comment.
Thanks so much for your visit, nice to 'meet' you. Love your poems, the words actually mean something which I love. Diane
Diane: Welcome here. Thanks for your kind words about my poetry.
Hi There, Claire.. (I think that is your name.).. I always enjoy your poems. Birds are like ballet dancers.. I can't see them on our roof--but love to watch them flying in and out all day long to the feeders on my deck...
Maybe your seagulls want some of your coffee.... ha ha
Thanks for a great poem.
Hugs,
Betsy
I can hear it!
And I have a picture of it from years ago: http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_s2DGJ0DYsDU/Sf7eqdP1boI/AAAAAAAACIc/T-OGgdqhJds/s1600-h/gulls.jpg.
Betsy from Tennessee:I am not sharing my coffee with any seagull! So pleased you like this poem. Yes I am called Claire! X
Chris Benjamin: I have just looked at this photo and I feel that the ridge that these guys were standing on is an exact replica of my roof or if not then one that matches the words in my poem so perfectly. Thanks so much for this.
Perfect! I've seen that so often myself. I love how you bring in all the different dance styles...
Seaguls can make a lot of noise, many seem to think, but I love them! :) Roof dancers.. lovely words..
Lovely poem! :)
Greetings from Viola! :)
Crafty Green Poet: There are so many different sounds of feet moving the dancers seemed most appropriate glad you liked the idea.Thanks.
Viola: Seagulls are a sign of the sea to this who don't have them bothering them.In Cornwall they are quite a nuisance without any romantic notions! Pleased you liked my poem.
What a fun poem! Had my mind going up and down, along with the birds! :)
Nancy@A Rural Journey: So pleased you were able to picture this noisy activity. :)
A nice and unusual way to look at the seagulls. I was wondering if you'd tell us what type of bird it was before the end :)
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Al:I am pleased this poem ad an air of mystery about it! :)
Ola: Welcome here. I do hope you will enjoy reading my poems. :)
Seagulls are very much like tap dancers on the roof. I hadn't thought of them in that way before.
Cherry Pie:Seagulls certainly make their presence felt wherever they are.
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