haiku poem 1
twelve days after deluge
sky blue sun perfect
floods gone great rain threat died too
big puddles remain
royal then navy
above few minute clouds float
peach fades disappears
light lost black conquers
moon illuminates cloud wisps
stars accompany
*thanks to Chris (Benjibopper) see my favourite blogs, for the idea of this format of verses in , haikus from a poet in Nova Scoteia.*
32 comments:
Beautiful! Glad you are having respite from the rains!!
A beautiful depiction of your recovering landscape. We still have some very large 'puddles' here.
KaHolly: Thanks and these dry ays have been much appreciated.
Vintage Jane: So pleased you enjoyed this poem. Thanks.
I loved this, and would really, really like some rain over here as well. Strange really, rain is something that we always seem to have too much or too little of. Here we are firmly on the too little side of the equation. Rain promised, but only incontinent pigeon falls received. Sigh.
I enjoyed this, too. Economical and effective choice of words. Good use of rhyme/rhythm and alliteration. Well done.
Elephants Child: Pleased that you liked this. Rain, too much, too little, why can it never be just right? oh yes the climate is the answer!
Yvonne: I listen and take on advice.I am so glad that you enjoyed this for all the reasons you stated.
very appropriate given the floods over here!
How wonderful it feels when the sun finally shines. :)
The time after rain is always beautiful.
John Gray: I feel this can be applied to so many parts of the UK.
E G CameraGirl: I do agree.
CherryPie: After all the rain it certainly has felt extra good!
I love how the colors come alive in this.
Lisa@ Two Bears Farm: Thanks.
A lovely, descriptive piece again! After a period of frosty but beautiful sunny weather we are back to very heavy rain again here today. I wouldn't be surprised to hear there has been more flooding, thankfully we live on the top of the hill so don't suffer such problems :-)
ShySongbird: Thanks for lovely comment. We too live on the top of a hill so look down on the rural valley which always changes great for ideas.
Very nice poem and very nice format, Cuby.
Welshcakes: Thank you so much for your kind words.
lovely descriptions
Crafty Green Poet: Thank you.
Sounds like you all have had way too much rain... We have been in need of rain here --but this weekend, we had quite a bit... Good for us though since we needed rain.. Crazy how some areas get too much and some get too little... Oh Well--Mother Nature does her own thing.
Merry Christmas.
Hugs,
Betsy
This form worked really well for you!
The poet I mentioned is Brian Bartlett: http://husky1.smu.ca/~bbartlett/.
Couple of my experiments with haiku layered are at: http://benjibopper.blogspot.ca/search?q=haikus.
Chris: Thank you, I loved playing with the words and reforming each haiku over and over until this final poem.
Betsy: It seems that where ever you are the weather is always wrong but then 'that's life'.
Thank you for visiting my blog and now I have been reading and enjoying yours too. This is a nice subject for a poem, one big thing has happened and now we are waiting for normal life to be resumed and the next thing to come along. I agree with Yvonne that I liked the use of alliteration.
I read about flooding in parts of the UK. Nice poem about it!
Jenny Woolf: Welcome here. Pleased to see you enjoyed reading some of my poetry, that you liked this poem. We see rain on the forecast so can only wonder when normality will arrive.
Al: Sad to see the homes and livelihoods that have been ruined by floods. My poem summed up what I could see in my rural view thanks for your comment.
I hope you-all have a very MERRY CHRISTMAS!
Jerry: We certainly did thank you.
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